How do we write a good composition during exam
Sujested version
1 beginning(introduction of the topic)
2 body part (main idea)
3 Ending(conclusion)
Note: 1 try to contain all the aspects that are required
2 Write correct sentences(try to avoid grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes.)
3 Write neatly.
4 Don’t write it too short or too long.
Suggestion: words required-10 words< words required+10 words
5 Avoid using words or expressions that you are uncertain about. Actually, to express the same meaning, there are always several choices open to you.
6 Avoid using complicated long sentence if you not sure about it’s correctness.
7 Pay attention to the use of punctuation.
8 Allot at least 15 minutes for composition writing.
9 When a title is required, try to make it being able to indicate the main idea of the composition and avoid using a title which is too flashy or too exotic.
10 Note that you should apply the proper form for the writing if required.(eg: a letter, a diary, a notice etc.)
Instructions for spare time training.
1 Extra materials
2 Practise writing short composition at least once a week.
以前英语作文评分依据是根据要点和语言准确度而定,但近几年要求“使用较多语法结构和词汇”,因此要想得高分,除了要点和语言准确度以外,还必须在较复杂的句子结构或较高级的词汇上有所表现。句式单一,缺乏生气的文章,哪怕无任何错误也不可能得高分,相反“有些错误,但是为了使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致”,给分档次仍在最高档(21~25分)。
一、以下四种手段是增加句子复杂性的常见方法,也是得高分的“亮点”。
1.改变句子的开头方式,不要一味地都是主语开头,接着是谓语、宾语,最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首,或用分词做状语等。
[原文]We met at the school gate and went there together early in the morning.
[修正]Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together.
[原文]The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news.
[修正]Hearing the bad news, the young man couldn’t help crying.
2.在整篇文章中,避免只使用一两个句式,要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等。
①强调句
[原文]My parents praised Ah Fu warmly. It had saved my little sister bravely.
[修正]My parents praised Ah Fu warmly. It was our brave Ah Fu who had saved my little sister bravely.
②由what等引导的从句,此处的what相当于中文的“所……”,有很大的概括力,如:
[原文]We had to stand there to catch the offender.
[修正]What we had to do was (to) stand there, trying to catch the offender.
What China has achieved in recent years is known through the world.
China is no longer what it used to be.
③由with或without引导的短语。如:
He sat in a chair with a newspaper in the hand.
④分词短语。如:
Satisfied with the result, He decided to go on with a new experiment.
⑤倒装句。如:
Only in this way can we achieve our goal.
Never before have I seen such a wonderful film.
⑥省略句。如:
If so, victory will be ours.
You can make some changes wherever necessary.
⑦对比,这是中文中也常用的方法。如:
Failure is not a crime, but failure to learn from failure is.
When I play, I feel excited, and after it I feel relaxed.
3.通过分句和合句,增强句子的连贯性和表现力。
[原文]He stopped us half an hour ago. He made us catch the next offender.
[修正]He stopped us half an hour ago and made us catch the next offender.
[原文]We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced.
Some told stories. Some played chess.
[修正]After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing,telling jokes and playing chess.
4.学会使用过渡词。如:
①递进: then(然后), besides(还有), furthermore(而且), moreover(此外)等。
②转折: however(然而), but(但是), on the country(相反), after all(毕竟)等。
③总结: finally(最后), at last(最后), in brief(总之), in conclusion(最后)等。
④强调: indeed(确实), certainly(一定), surely(确定), above all(尤其)等。
⑤对比: in the same way(同样地), just as(正如), on the one hand…on the
other hand(一方面……另一方面……)等。
5.注意使用不同长度的句子。
二、对于“较复杂的词汇”,可以从以下几个方面着手。
1.注意使用词组、习语来代替一些单词,以增加文采。如:
[原文]A new railway is being built in my hometown.
[修正]A new railway is under construction in my hometown.
2.使用一些很有“洋味”的单词。如:
Thank you for sharing the time with us.
The way he views the world is very practical.
3.避免重复使用某一单词或短语。如:
[原文]I like reading while my brother likes watching television.
[修正]I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
习作1Possible version:
Dear Smith,
I know you want to find a job in Beijing. I read an advertisement in today’s “21st Century ”, an English paper here. Beijing Ladder Information Company is running a school. So they need native - speaker English teachers. What they prefer is a university degree in education or other related fields,which you have. And a foreign expert certification is also required. I think you are the right person they want.
If you are interested please directly call or write to the company. The telephone number is 86-10-68019433, and their E-mail address is : liecbj @ hotmail. com
Good luck.
Your’s
Li Hua
习作2:
Comment:
Mary is a clever girl with good manners. She is always ready to help others and therefore gets along very well with her classmates.
Having a special interest in Chinese, she speaks it very well. Mary is also good at maths and does a lot of exercises every day. She enjoys doing experiments in chemistry labs ,but sometimes she needs to be more careful. In all the subjects , physics is the most favorite one to her and she is one of the best in this subject. She always tries her best to make better progress and things better.
All the teachers like her very much.
Signature: Wang Ming